Monday, September 5, 2011

The Conversation.

Today was her one month wedding anniversary. She glanced at her reflection in the six foot long mirror that adorned the bedroom wall. She looked beautiful. Her hair was tied up in a French roll and saree perfectly draped. She smiled at her reflection and knew she looked stunning.

Suddenly, her eyes were covered by someone’s palms. He whispered slowly while taking his hands away from her eyes, “Keep your eyes closed”. There stood a well built man. He was wearing a jet black three button suit with nicely gelled hair.

“What is it?” she asked, surprised. “Something that will make you smile” he beamed and handed over a golden box beautifully wrapped with red lace. She opened it carefully and gasped, “Whoa! This rock is huge!”

“Do you like it?” he smiled. “Of course, but..” she suddenly stopped. “But what?” he asked “The ring looks expensive.” she said softly.

“Nothing is expensive for me and anything, just anything for a smile from you.” he boasted. She fell silent. She knew that was the truth. He was one of the youngest businessmen in the country who had struggled his way right to the top. But it was not the complete truth. These things hardly mattered to her. The jewellery, the luxury, the parties, nothing were important.

She looked in his eyes. “Yes, you are right, you can afford anything. But I don’t need a diamond ring to make me smile”. He looked shocked. “Don’t you like the ring? We will get it exchanged!” he added hurriedly. “No, you don’t get it.” she sighed. He repeated, “No! You don’t get it. I am just proving my love!” She said, “You don’t have to prove anything, you just have to love.” To which he retorted, “But I always thought women are happiest when they get gifts, especially diamonds!” He was confused as he couldn’t understand her thoughts.

“Yes she is, but she is happier when her man looks at her and says she is beautiful. She is happy when he holds her hand and says you are my life. When he listens to her inner thoughts, shares his dreams with her. That’s what a woman really wants. It’s not necessary to present an expensive gift to make her smile. The deed can be done even with a simple silver ring and expressing your love truly.” She was still staring into his eyes.

He got up suddenly, which made her anxious. “I am sorry. I didn’t mean to hurt you and I really liked the ring. I just blurted out what I have been feeling since we got married.” He kept moving away till he reached the door.

She finally asked worriedly, “Where are you going?”  He looked serious. Turning back he calmly replied, “To get you the simple silver ring you mentioned and then I’ll do exactly what you asked me to do.”

Both of them burst out laughing.


Blasphemous Aesthete said...

LOL, the Business guy had some good sense of humour along with skills.

A nice narrative.

A little constructive criticism here, if it is allowed. If not, please do not read any further.

When the guy covered her eyes with his hand, the reader might be wondering what kind of man he is. But since the eyes of the subject are covered by his hands, She cannot see him. Though the narrator is telling the story from a third person point of view, the reader would still like to see the character emerge from the eyes of the lady, rather than knowing it before She did. I feel that would make it a little more, lets say, umm a little more interesting.

Blasphemous Aesthete

Varsha Shinde said...

You have captured what exactly it is that women want...not dimonds,or trappings of riches, but to be loved,wanted and cherished.Well written !

Thomas Viruvelil said...

Normally business guy do not hv time for such niceties.Money make him more crazy than the woman who is already in his cage.So u r writing story instead of a blog?

ujwala said...

@Blasphemous Thank u so much for the comment and Yes your constructive criticism is allowed.I shall note the point u mentioned.:)

ujwala said...

@Thomas Its a piece of fiction.You can call it anything a story or a blog post.

Deepak Shinde said...

Nicely written. Seems poetic - both the style and the subject. You have a flair for dialoges, keep writing.

Ishita said...

Nice post a way cute I love the way you expressed it and yeah love is what matters than materialistic things.

Anonymous said...

Nice one, loved the build up and the specially the end.

I guess u hit the nail on its head with the guys reaction.. was thinking, probably I too would have done the same had a girl reacted in similar manner ;)

Aishwarya Narayanan said...

....And i sailed away on a floating carpet to the scene you just described. Awwww...

Anonymous said...

Well written..
And this proves women are never happy. Ring do to she wants *just a compliment* and compliment do to, she will miss the ring.
I think what matters is with what affection/feeling & intention a gift is given, be it a compliment or a ring, that shouldn't matter.
I liked the way you write, got me into the character easily. :)

ujwala said...

@Ishita -Thank you.:)
@cosmobong - :) Thank you...That was the most important reaction..Im glad you could relate to it.
@Aishwarya Narayanan - Thank u..:) :)
@mohitshroff - Yup, to an extent you are right. Its how you want to interpret it.:)

Chintan Gupta said...

You know I read somewhere, if a man brings a rose each day, that makes the bond much stronger than a huge diamond once an year :) Love needs a daily dose ;)

Chintu Singh

Manju M said...

Such a sweet story...good that it ended on a happy note...its true that a woman's heart finds happiness in something beyond and care..nicely written!

Noble said...

:) beautifully written ... these are those little moments which keeps relationship floating

Be Blessed